[Janouk]: 33.Poetry.Simon Says

2006-05-03 Emily: Reminds me of... fish.

Like, human fish.

That was a fun, neat little scribble to read. I especially like the first two lines and the abstract rhythm.

2006-05-03 Janouk: Thanks for your constructive criticism (if that's the right term), I appreciated it very much ! ;)

(Now it reminds me of fish a bit as well ^.^)

2006-05-10 DorianP: Hey, this is quite good. It's macabre, in its funny, light way. Well done, I always have trouble with making smaller poems.

2006-05-16 Janouk: Thanks! My problem is that I often write a longer poem, but it devides himself into several subjects, so the longer one actually contains several smaller ones ^__^
Your longer ones are good though. Maybe if you just try to describe something small or simple, like...ehm...a pencil :p

2006-05-20 DorianP: I hereby officially declare that the next poem I write will be called "the pencil"

And you really don't want to know what the first version of my longer poems look like, most of the time :P

And you should write more, because you're perfectly able to, regardless of what you think.

2006-05-25 Janouk: w00t! "the pencil" will be the greatest poem ever! ;)
^.^
I guess I could use some practise, yes :)