[PhoenixV]: 638.Caged Man, Part One | Rating: 0.45 |
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2007-04-25 Eleanor: When I read this, I’m reminded of the book Slaughterhouse Five by Kurt Vonnegut, Jr. I recommend it. Anyway, you’ve set up an interesting scenario. I’m curious to see where you go with it.
On a more mundane, technical note, your text is riddled with spelling and punctuation errors, which make it difficult to appreciate the story since our eye is drawn to them. If you like, I can help you fix them if you are unsure of doing so yourself.
2007-04-25 Eleanor: Others take notice, start calling him pathetic and unworthy, yet hey know not that he hears. This is why you shouldn’t rely solely on a spell checker. It recognizes hey as a word, but you obviously meant to write they here. Otherwise, it’s much better. Nice.