[Tyr Zalo Hawk]: 712.Poetry.Haikus.FadingDawn

2010-12-05 Annie: I think you actually want fire to be two syllables in this piece...if it's one, you only have four syllables in your last line, if it's two, you have five.
On another note, I love this poem! I feel like it's a beautiful haiku that follows in the footsteps of other great haikus. You document a single moment in nature with such details as the redness of the moon, the fury of the waves, and yet the smooth calm of fireflies. Interesting choice capitalizing "Red" - not quite sure what it means for the poem to personify just "Red."

2010-12-07 Tyr Zalo Hawk: You're... right. I think I mistyped this one when I posted it again, but I can't figure out how or why. I remember there being a comment when I submitted this to my poetry class about the last line being too long... maybe I fixed it without meaning to <_<

Also, the personification of Red is more or less a commentary on the nature of art as a signifier for beauty, power, and inspiration. The color itself is the most overwhelming spectacle in an world full of vibrant motion and imagery, making it seem, at least to the speaker my poem is supposed to portray, that this one color dominates the world, coating everything within its aura.

Alternatively: It might have just been a typo.

I've been known to overthink, and I've been known to type too fast. Which one is it this time? The world may never know >=D

2010-12-08 Annie: Haha. :p